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©2008-2009 ~Lenneth4
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second tets page !
hope you gonna like it^^
old work too .

made in tvpaint too.

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Very simplistic and catchy. The bold lines are attractive.
And i love the hint of color.

Frame 1: Her pose is relaxed but her shoulders are so far down i think her arms will fall off.

Frame 2: I like the faded background. If you might put this in color i would say give the background a slight color tint and leave the character black and white. I like the emotion on her face.

Frame 3: Wall on left slanted inwards too much.
Eh so is the other one. This offsets the whole frame making her room appear way too long and her stance be super wide.

Frame 4: Nothing stands out.
Great work.

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frame1
hey thanx! you are right for the shoulders!
i never noticed that! thanx!

frame2 , hummm nice idea for character black and white +background color, i'm think to that!
i think to redrawn all this story because i stopped after a too long time...(for many reasons)

frame3:ah yes , i see, thanx for infos!
i get , the room appears way too big and long...

frame4: ok!
thanx , i was plan to make a little comeback with this comics in free reading for deviant art, but i think waiting a bit(its not a problem, i should finish other project anyway.)

thanx again for this detailled ,constructive critique.
deviants should know you!
:iconkevinqagoncillo:
The simple art of this comic is absolutely wonderful :XD:

Love the style and the backgrounds ^__^

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:iconlenneth4:
Thanx a lot!!!
maybe i was a bit too simple , dont know, but i enjoyed it!
thanx again
for the room, i just get inspired by my own student room lool

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very nice comic.
I like the girl's face. She is cute

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:iconlenneth4:
Thanx a lot!!Lilibeth is her name! ^__^

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Np^^

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i really like ur style, its simple but catchy.

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thanx a lot buddy!!
sometimes simple is good too.

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